Splendidly presented but I suggest the following revisions:
1) You could mention the intention of having the girl and the rabbit (references The Mad Hatter in Alice in Wonderland) peeping behind red curtains showing only their faces suggests the fragility of memory. Your points about the red curtains suggesting an old fashioned cinema are effective, but also the curtains suggest performance and theatricality because the theatre is all about illusion. Google images "theatre curtains in old cinema" and include one of these images.
When discussing the strong influence of Alice in Wonderland, say "intertextually references....." use media language.
Binary opposites, this is about contrast so when discussing Panel 4 explain that binary opposites create drama. So when the girl enters another reality or dimension she encounters a built up uban world which contrasts with the dreamlike, fairytale quality of nostalgic images of the past and/or the surreal landscape of dream.
Perhaps for Question 1 but I'll explain intertextual influences/reminders now whilst I remember them.
Your music video reminds of "Tom's Midnight Garden" by Phillipa Pearce and well worth reading) when young Tom escapes from reality when the clock strikes 13 into a world of the past. From the urban concrete world of reality he is transported into a magical garden which connotes freedom, innocence and friendship etc. Towards the end of the novel he crashes out the door hoping to reach the enormous space of his midnight garden garden but instead falls over a dustbin and crashes onto the concrete into the world of reality.
In a sense when your performer moves into reality the colour drakens and becomes more muted. She is disorientated by reality. Thus the conclusion in your music video is that she returns to her "antique" landscape but is tempted to take the liquid which transports her to adulthood?
The same theme (time travel) is explored in Life on Mars (BBC TV) when Sam Tyler at the end of Series 1 jumps off the top of a car park of 21st century police headquarters and hurtles back into the smoke filled rooms and dilapidated world of 1972 where he had found companionship and so on. Dark and intriguing themes Lydnsey.
End of my commentary on interte4xtuality.
Panel 3) Emphasise how your print productions amplify the notion of illusion and reality which informs the narrative structure of your music video.
The circular shape of the fish eye lense and image ironically references the circular narrative of your music video which ends where it starts; Pulp Fiction has a similar circular narrative - it ends in the same diner during a hold up where it begins!
Panel 5
You could mention how the music video reflects the quirky style of the music. Also I'd explain at some point in your evaluation that the girl seems to be under a spell.Thus implying that the music casts a similar magical effect on a potential fan base. The music will transport the audience into another world....
Strongly proficient at the moment, may be higher. The intertextual references I've mentioned may be better placed in question 1, but also in question 3 when discussing the appeal of the music video. Spread your inter textual references between questions so you have no repetitive phrases.
Stronger with revisions. Re your discussion about Panel 5, I'd suggest that you explain perhaps more clearly that the narrative structure of the music video is repeated in the print productions. Thus the digipak is rather like a picture book. It's appeal being that it that it follows the girl's story from sitting with her knickknacks at the table to returning from her journey to the "drink me" bottle.
This is a very strong element that links the productions and this needs to be emphasised in this aspect of your evaluation.
A quick point, you may wish to add that the uniqueness of the structure of the digipak is that it is like a picture book.
Perhaps you may wish to keep this point for Question 1 when discussing how you challenge the conventions of main stream album cover lay art by relying on a strong narrative. Thus the element of story is emphasised in your digipak. This also references the importance of narrative in the evocative, exciting and iconic story of Carroll's Alice in Wonderland. Thus you are not just marketing the artist but also providing a story.
This also links to the track being rather like the sound track of a film, thus you have provided the track with a filmed story!!! I hope this makes sense.
You may also wish to include how you've transported recurring motifs in your music video to your digipak - I've just emailed you re the concept of motifs.
Lyndsey I was assessing Billie Kemp's blog and another idea dawned on me re The Plantation Garden and the connotations of this location:
......The sense of magic is reflected in the sequences shot in Henry Trevor's restored plantation garden. In 1856 Henry Trevor transformed a chalk quarry into a magical garden. Thus the location is reflects the theme of a form of blurred boundaries between illusion and reality.
Google http://www.plantationgarden.co.uk/history/
You may want to include some of the Victorian photographs onto your blog in either this question or question 1. Focusing on the importance of location. In literature and in film (remember thriller conventions) locations are used to reflect character's inner world or beliefs. I can discuss this with you in class."...
More layers Lydsey....you could also tell Robin or I'll have a word in class when he is over his bug.
Splendidly presented but I suggest the following revisions:
ReplyDelete1) You could mention the intention of having the girl and the rabbit (references The Mad Hatter in Alice in Wonderland) peeping behind red curtains showing only their faces suggests the fragility of memory. Your points about the red curtains suggesting an old fashioned cinema are effective, but also the curtains suggest performance and theatricality because the theatre is all about illusion. Google images "theatre curtains in old cinema" and include one of these images.
When discussing the strong influence of Alice in Wonderland, say "intertextually references....." use media language.
Binary opposites, this is about contrast so when discussing Panel 4 explain that binary opposites create drama. So when the girl enters another reality or dimension she encounters a built up uban world which contrasts with the dreamlike, fairytale quality of nostalgic images of the past and/or the surreal landscape of dream.
Perhaps for Question 1 but I'll explain intertextual influences/reminders now whilst I remember them.
Your music video reminds of "Tom's Midnight Garden" by Phillipa Pearce and well worth reading) when young Tom escapes from reality when the clock strikes 13 into a world of the past. From the urban concrete world of reality he is transported into a magical garden which connotes freedom, innocence and friendship etc. Towards the end of the novel he crashes out the door hoping to reach the enormous space of his midnight garden garden but instead falls over a dustbin and crashes onto the concrete into the world of reality.
In a sense when your performer moves into reality the colour drakens and becomes more muted. She is disorientated by reality. Thus the conclusion in your music video is that she returns to her "antique" landscape but is tempted to take the liquid which transports her to adulthood?
The same theme (time travel) is explored in Life on Mars (BBC TV) when Sam Tyler at the end of Series 1 jumps off the top of a car park of 21st century police headquarters and hurtles back into the smoke filled rooms and dilapidated world of 1972 where he had found companionship and so on. Dark and intriguing themes Lydnsey.
End of my commentary on interte4xtuality.
Panel 3)
Emphasise how your print productions amplify the notion of illusion and reality which informs the narrative structure of your music video.
The circular shape of the fish eye lense and image ironically references the circular narrative of your music video which ends where it starts; Pulp Fiction has a similar circular narrative - it ends in the same diner during a hold up where it begins!
Panel 5
You could mention how the music video reflects the quirky style of the music. Also I'd explain at some point in your evaluation that the girl seems to be under a spell.Thus implying that the music casts a similar magical effect on a potential fan base. The music will transport the audience into another world....
Strongly proficient at the moment, may be higher. The intertextual references I've mentioned may be better placed in question 1, but also in question 3 when discussing the appeal of the music video. Spread your inter textual references between questions so you have no repetitive phrases.
Stronger with revisions. Re your discussion about Panel 5, I'd suggest that you explain perhaps more clearly that the narrative structure of the music video is repeated in the print productions. Thus the digipak is rather like a picture book. It's appeal being that it that it follows the girl's story from sitting with her knickknacks at the table to returning from her journey to the "drink me" bottle.
ReplyDeleteThis is a very strong element that links the productions and this needs to be emphasised in this aspect of your evaluation.
Keep up your splendid commitment.
A quick point, you may wish to add that the uniqueness of the structure of the digipak is that it is like a picture book.
ReplyDeletePerhaps you may wish to keep this point for Question 1 when discussing how you challenge the conventions of main stream album cover lay art by relying on a strong narrative. Thus the element of story is emphasised in your digipak. This also references the importance of narrative in the evocative, exciting and iconic story of Carroll's Alice in Wonderland. Thus you are not just marketing the artist but also providing a story.
This also links to the track being rather like the sound track of a film, thus you have provided the track with a filmed story!!! I hope this makes sense.
You may also wish to include how you've transported recurring motifs in your music video to your digipak - I've just emailed you re the concept of motifs.
ReplyDeleteLyndsey I was assessing Billie Kemp's blog and another idea dawned on me re The Plantation Garden and the connotations of this location:
ReplyDelete......The sense of magic is reflected in the sequences shot in Henry Trevor's restored plantation garden. In 1856 Henry Trevor transformed a chalk quarry into a magical garden. Thus the location is reflects the theme of a form of blurred boundaries between illusion and reality.
Google http://www.plantationgarden.co.uk/history/
You may want to include some of the Victorian photographs onto your blog in either this question or question 1. Focusing on the importance of location. In literature and in film (remember thriller conventions) locations are used to reflect character's inner world or beliefs. I can discuss this with you in class."...
More layers Lydsey....you could also tell Robin or I'll have a word in class when he is over his bug.